6/10 - Nicely executed, and credit for using in-game items. However, minus points for being predictable, and dressing Kystelle up a tad scruffy!
I see you're quite cheerful, Jokku. So, I think you should dress up to suit - get rid of that helm for a start!
Wear nothing on your head, perhaps a simple necklace or the Lei necklace of you have one. For your chest, a beachwear top, with flared trousers for the legs. Keep your hands bare, and wear navigator boots. Lastly, equip a cape of your choice.